m1kclark's art Reviews on Newgrounds

[Photorealistic Kitchen!]

Excellent. Just excellent.

Your work in textures is so far beyond my skills that I cannot make any useful comments, except to say the mapping, interpolation, and resolution are perfect for the model. The label, the woodgrain, the steel look like real materials, which justifies the 10 hours you spent.

The geometries, meanwhile, are all nice and smooth; there are no "telltale" signs that its CG, and the object design is really nice. I actually applaud you for that dishtowel! Did you use a Wave modifier, or did you hand-model the folds with SubSurf modifier, or did you use another technique?

The one and only thing that I would give a 4/5 on is the lighting. It is *almost* there, but there are some strange things going on. For example, the wine glasses aren't casting a shadow on the countertop. Also the shadow of the wine bottle clearly shows that you have 3-4 lights arranged in a horizontal line; the light from a big window like that would cast one broad, soft shadow instead of those multiple shadows. The soft shadows looks perfect elsewhere, it's just on the wine bottle that the shadows are weird. The last lighting problem is that the apples, the wood of the window, and the glass vials (on the left) all seem to be lit from the front, while the drawers under the countertop are not. It makes the apples look a little like they are glowing compared to the bottom of the image (I would check Materials for the Emit setting on those apples).

I hope my comments were as constructive as you were looking for. Cheers!

DoloresC responds:

Thank you! Your comment is very constructive! :) And yes, I was looking for one like this! Thank to that I can open my project once again and study mistakes or check why there is good setting and bad looking :)

About textures - thank you. If you need help, try searching some done textures in net and suit them into your model. It will help u in the beginning to understand how it exacly works :) then just low the opacity of it and try to draw it. After sometime you will do it alone automatically :)

Dishtowel - it's just simple simulation of the cloth. Of course was done thousand time before we made it like this :)

Lightning - hmm. that's very interesting thing, because there is only one light. And the light is behind the window. There is no light inside! So shadows should be correct like in real world.

About shadow under glasses - tbh I was suprised when I put the same glass (I've got reference in the kitchen) in the middle of the day on the table and there was no shadow under it O.o I searched through the internet and finally read that not every glass casts shadow. It depends on it's thickness! More shdow - more thickness.

Hmm, you are right about glowing apples. But there was no emit O.o hmm, i think maybe plate and window are a little bit too glossy and because of that we've got optical illusion that apple is glowing and in real it's just reflection? Hmm...

Thank you! <3

[Microscope]

I said this elsewhere, but I want to emphasize how important it is: Bevel your edges to make them more realistic. Excellent otherwise.

mematron responds:

Beveled edges is a personal choice, not some some 3D modeling axiom. It's realistic. That's why it's identifiable. I'm taking a painterly approach to this so some parts are tight while others, loose. Still, some are lost and found.

The end result is hyper-real like this http://www.mematron.com

If I wanted real then I would have uploaded a picture of the real microscope.

[Coffee Shop 2]

Excellent design and artistic concept. I have two technical comments:

1) Bevel your edges. I have literally said this dozens of times to 3D artists on NG, so it's not personal, but the infinitely-sharp edges on a perfect cube created in 3D software is one of the first give-aways that it isn't realistic.

2) Along the same lines, you have to make sure any curved surfaces have a LOT of edges and vertices, or you can see that the curved surface is really a polygon. That's another realism-killer. I'm looking specifically at the mid-right, where the display window curves toward the back wall. In full-size, it's obvious that it's made of 7 segments; increase that to 20 and it won't be noticeable.

But it's good stuff, and I'm glad to see all your posts.

mematron responds:

This is conceptual art. It's more than acceptable for the cast and crew.

[Country salon - view 1]

It's wonderful! The lighting, the textures, the ambiance, and even the image design and placement - they are all excellent and really suggest that this is a real room that people would use.

There's only one thing, tiny but huge, keeping it from being "brilliant". Bevel your edges. It'll really add to the realism on the tables and chairs. In Blender (I LOVE BLENDER), it's fastest to (1) go into Edit mode, (2) select points, (3) hit the W key and click on "Bevel", (4) choose a subdivision, (5) choose how deep the bevel goes, and perhaps (6) wait for it to do the calculation. If your table is 10 wide and 10 long, then the bevel should be about 0.02-0.05 deep. You'll have to play around with subdivision, though: lower subdivisions look terrible without smoothing, but smoothing can cause problems with flat surfaces; meanwhile higher subdivisions can take a long time and can create unpredictable mesh points and criss-crossed edges.

The only other way I've found to bevel something is to start with a tiny UV sphere and basically extrude it to make the flat surfaces. This gives you exquisite control of the mesh and the level of detail. But it also means literally redesigning EVERY mesh object, so it probably isn't worth the time here in this almost-perfect image. In the future, however, it might be a useful trick.

Happy modeling, and I hope to see more of your stuff!

DoloresC responds:

Wow! I love so much creative critique! Awesome! THANK YOU!
Unfortunately I didn't model it :) I just textured it, gave light and rendered! But I'm now learning modeling so I will know what to look more precisely!:P
Thank you, thank you, thank you! You are awesome critique! :D
I hope to have more so awesome critique like that in other renders so I can improve myself more!:)

[L'Attesa]

Technical comments:
- The entire image is too dark to really see anything.
- Back-lighting would help give a lot of depth to the image, so we understand the size and dimensions of the character, the table, the background, and whatever that is on the left.
- All of the textures are too stark in their colors, and they are all flat, which gives everything a plastic feel. I'm not sure what you were going for, but i don't think it was "plastic". The eyelashes, too, are having a texture problem, I think in terms of a low resolution image.
- Look up instructions for how painters draw skin; yours is very flat-looking.

Content comments:
- I'm afraid her face has entered the "Uncanny Valley" of art; it looks more realistic than a doll, but not quite like a real face, and the audience's reaction is negative. Work on the geometry, especially around the eyes and mouth.
- Nice hair, though!
- I like the starkness of the bright glowing thing, but because the image lacks depth, it just doesn't impress the way you meant it to.

Good luck.

Ciullo-Corporation responds:

Thank you for the feedback... it's really appreciated

Technical answer:
- there's nothing else to see than the character herself
- there's no textures in any image here, only procedural shader and vertex geometry
- the eyelash are made by dynamic hairs, one of our first attempt to be honest
- flat-looking skin is mainly due to loss of definition in converting image format, I worked personally on the shader

Content answer:
- really she's a humanoid alien
- dynamic hair
- don't know what kind of impression, the goal of the image is presenting a character

[Pond]

I have many reactions, some good, some bad, some just things I noticed.

1) That is one excellent rock. The color, texture, shape, and feel are all just perfect. But am I right in thinking that you have 10 copies of *the same* rock scattered through the pond?

2) I love the plants! And that tree-bark texture is not only a great-quality image, but you mapped it perfectly so it didn't distort at all.

3) It's sunny: why is the rest of the image so dark?

4) What are those white particles on the lower left? Between that and the darkness, it almost looks like you were originally going to do the scene at night and changed your mind.

5) I'm not positive that all the length scales match up. The branch in the foreground looks pretty thick, maybe as big as my thigh. But that means the reeds are all huge, taller than I am, and those rocks are middle-sized, like a Labrador could just barely sit on top of one.

6) The layout is really nice, showing a varied but enclosed little scene with a lot of diversity in it. I'm voting 5/5 despite my comments. :-)

Nasenbaerr responds:

You are right I have copied all this stones from one because I was simply to lazy.
The scene is so dark because it's inside of a ruin of a Flooded house and the roof is still there.
I think the white particles are a render fail.

[F-22 Raptor]

BEVEL YOUR EDGES.
Sorry for using all capital letters, but that's my advice on 80% of all 3D drawings here on NG. Also, I would tune the perspective on your camera a little bit. I can't explain it simply, but the mathematical rate at which the shapes seem to "shrink" as you move away from the camera, that rate is too shallow. It makes the model look small, like a plastic model instead of a 30-ft structure. Then again, that could also be due to the lack of textures.

Good starting point, though. I hope you use this geometry in other works!

Nasenbaerr responds:

Thanks for the comment.
I think what you mean with the thing that makes my objekts "shrink" is the Focal Lengt but I must acknowledge that the door in the background and the lamps are far to big compared to the F-22 and thats why it looks to small. :(

[Mulan's Sword]

You didn't take my advice on your last submission. The image's biggest problem are those edges: they are still too sharp. It's especially noticeable at the sword tip, where there's a clear triangular point instead of a smooth curve leading to the tip of the sword. Understand?

But, your material design is awesome, the lighting, layout, and overall scheme is perfectly suited to showing off your work. Keep creating, please!!

Lusin responds:

Ok bevel edges. Thanks I will.

[Doraemon]

The geometry is right for the style of the character, but you need a higher-resolution texture. I can see the pixels of his whiskers and around his mouth, which I shouldn't be able to. I'd say do 3x or 5x higher resolution on the texture and it'll be a nice character.

Silvertwilight responds:

Understood, I really should.
Thank you : )

[Kisiing in the rain]

Passionate!

clayscence responds:

thank you :D